Hey, everyone! I've been doing a little bit of re-reading of the comic and I realized there are quite a few instances in which I had copy+pasted dialogue from the old script to the new, changes I made in the recent past that muddle continuity or... some past dialogue that doesn't make sense because I no English very good back then. SO IT'S EDITING TIME! I will make a list here for easy access so you guys don't have to read the entire story over again. Unless you want to.
(GOSH, I WAS SO TEMPTED TO FIX THE ART, TOO. SOOO UGLY. BUT I HELD ONNNNN!)
DAY 1, Page 15: Krystal's previous description of Meï failed to mention that she ONCE worked for Fox, but she no longer does. I also reworded Krystal's description of the event.
DAY 1, Page 17: Krystal previously mentioned the name of a character from the old script that no longer has a place in the story.
DAY 1, Page 18: Reworded the first 3 panels. Sandy was too aware of her cockiness here to the point that some of her future actions would not make sense. Also, added a little bit more of a clue on why Sandy thought Krystal found her through an unreliable source.
DAY 1, Page 29: Reworded some of Krystal's dialogue and changed the date of the party, which was incorrectly written as Wednesday.
DAY 2, Page 21: Changed last 3 panels because I no good English. Dialogue was previously confusing and Krystal did not clearly explain to Sandy why she was keeping her involvement hidden from Meï.
DAY 2, Page 22: Once again, fixing the party date that I screwed up.
DAY 2, Page 39: Fixed boxes to slightly differentiate Shadow's dialogue from Sandy's. Also added dialogue to emphasize Sandy's trust in Krystal's hunch.